Sorry you were sick, Jacquie. Glad you were able to still find the ability to be creative. It’s tough for me if I get thrown off even just a little bit. Hope you’re feeling better.
Absolutely loved this story!! So many layers. I love how the boy’s monstrous nature is vague and left to the imagination for the most part (like he’s not a straight up werewolf or something). I also enjoyed Alruna’s arc and the dynamic you played off the husband and wife and their relationship with children.
The pacing was really good, too. I struggle with telling these types of stories because I get too involved in scene structure frameworks borrowed mostly from film. So your ability to paint the narrative and characters so swiftly and expertly without getting caught up on too many details was impressive.
That was a great story, and an interesting take on the abandoned royalty trope.
The only thing that threw me off a bit was the informality of the interaction between the old couple and the king. It seems like there should be a bit more decorum between them.
Great writing! I really enjoyed the way you wove your tale, and it such a short space. I hope you’re on the mend now. I think Princess Aurora and Hercules can fit into this trope as well.
This is about the most perfect “weekend project” I’ve come across is ages. I wish I could type so eloquently and imaginatively as you did with this piece. I love the trope you selected as well. And I like your application of “in medias res” with the opening dialogue.
Sorry you were sick, Jacquie. Glad you were able to still find the ability to be creative. It’s tough for me if I get thrown off even just a little bit. Hope you’re feeling better.
Absolutely loved this story!! So many layers. I love how the boy’s monstrous nature is vague and left to the imagination for the most part (like he’s not a straight up werewolf or something). I also enjoyed Alruna’s arc and the dynamic you played off the husband and wife and their relationship with children.
The pacing was really good, too. I struggle with telling these types of stories because I get too involved in scene structure frameworks borrowed mostly from film. So your ability to paint the narrative and characters so swiftly and expertly without getting caught up on too many details was impressive.
Great work! Can’t wait to share this. 😁
Great story! Very interesting and so well written. Hope you're feeling better.
That was a great story, and an interesting take on the abandoned royalty trope.
The only thing that threw me off a bit was the informality of the interaction between the old couple and the king. It seems like there should be a bit more decorum between them.
Great work, Jacquie, especially feeling under par. 👏 Loved the fable feel. I guess Harry Potter fits the template, too.
Such a great story, and the explanation at the end - this was a fascinating concept, and beautifully written!
Hope you’re feeling much better after your encounter with Covid.
Great writing! I really enjoyed the way you wove your tale, and it such a short space. I hope you’re on the mend now. I think Princess Aurora and Hercules can fit into this trope as well.
This is about the most perfect “weekend project” I’ve come across is ages. I wish I could type so eloquently and imaginatively as you did with this piece. I love the trope you selected as well. And I like your application of “in medias res” with the opening dialogue.