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Sorry you were sick, Jacquie. Glad you were able to still find the ability to be creative. It’s tough for me if I get thrown off even just a little bit. Hope you’re feeling better.

Absolutely loved this story!! So many layers. I love how the boy’s monstrous nature is vague and left to the imagination for the most part (like he’s not a straight up werewolf or something). I also enjoyed Alruna’s arc and the dynamic you played off the husband and wife and their relationship with children.

The pacing was really good, too. I struggle with telling these types of stories because I get too involved in scene structure frameworks borrowed mostly from film. So your ability to paint the narrative and characters so swiftly and expertly without getting caught up on too many details was impressive.

Great work! Can’t wait to share this. 😁

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Thank you for such a wonderful review, Winston! I hear you about getting involved in scene structure. I think I struggle with short stories in part because I want to start at the beginning and tell the whole story, and I can get bogged down in details if I let myself ;-) I wasn't sure this structure would work, but I tried to keep it simple and see what happened.

I definitely lost my motivation to do much of anything for a few days, so this was a good incentive to get myself back writing :-) Thanks for coming up with this prompt, it was a lot of fun!

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