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Very exciting chapters. The visceral nature of the battle, the post battle interactions, the true emotions, the reality setting in. All of it makes me feel so close to these characters. Great job 👏

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Man, I was woozy reading about the arrow extraction! 😳

In the following sentence, I would recommend a full stop after the word “lightened” and either replace “and” with “then” so that the next sentence begins “Then he smiled...” or delete “and” altogether and say “He smiled...”: “But I had my answer when his face lightened, and he smiled gently in thanks, nodding and handing me the sack of clippings. “

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