Very exciting chapters. The visceral nature of the battle, the post battle interactions, the true emotions, the reality setting in. All of it makes me feel so close to these characters. Great job 👏
As always, thanks for reading! Writing the battle scenes is one of the more difficult parts for me, so I'm glad you didn't completely lose interest ;-) Especially since the characters are beginning to show some more of their darker sides...
Man, I was woozy reading about the arrow extraction! 😳
In the following sentence, I would recommend a full stop after the word “lightened” and either replace “and” with “then” so that the next sentence begins “Then he smiled...” or delete “and” altogether and say “He smiled...”: “But I had my answer when his face lightened, and he smiled gently in thanks, nodding and handing me the sack of clippings. “
I should note that, as far as I know, there's no evidence for arrow extractors like the kind I describe from this period, though they probably used something that just doesn't turn up in the archaeological record. Much later, there are a few medieval-looking devices like the famous Bradmore extractor used to pull an arrowhead from the face of future king Henry V that would make anyone woozy to think about. But the need continued when lots of people were getting shot with Indian arrows on the Great Plains, and I think it was in one of those accounts I read something about the spoon-shaped pullers being especially effective. Otherwise, I guess people were just stuck digging them out the hard way :-(
Very exciting chapters. The visceral nature of the battle, the post battle interactions, the true emotions, the reality setting in. All of it makes me feel so close to these characters. Great job 👏
As always, thanks for reading! Writing the battle scenes is one of the more difficult parts for me, so I'm glad you didn't completely lose interest ;-) Especially since the characters are beginning to show some more of their darker sides...
Man, I was woozy reading about the arrow extraction! 😳
In the following sentence, I would recommend a full stop after the word “lightened” and either replace “and” with “then” so that the next sentence begins “Then he smiled...” or delete “and” altogether and say “He smiled...”: “But I had my answer when his face lightened, and he smiled gently in thanks, nodding and handing me the sack of clippings. “
Yes, better! Thank you :-)
I should note that, as far as I know, there's no evidence for arrow extractors like the kind I describe from this period, though they probably used something that just doesn't turn up in the archaeological record. Much later, there are a few medieval-looking devices like the famous Bradmore extractor used to pull an arrowhead from the face of future king Henry V that would make anyone woozy to think about. But the need continued when lots of people were getting shot with Indian arrows on the Great Plains, and I think it was in one of those accounts I read something about the spoon-shaped pullers being especially effective. Otherwise, I guess people were just stuck digging them out the hard way :-(